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Leafy Bones

Tuesday 28 February 2012

Little Riding

It niggles the gelatine bit,
tilted lids and slightly bit lower lip.
If I were to-
it would never end,
one moment delirium
is my larger,
the next I can't handle
a half.
Leave/ stay
I daren't.
So long distilled solitude
and your unrefined path,
I cannot care
but you pump the liquid so neatly
it's best to stick to the levelled cement,
ride out the wolfy.

5 comments:

  1. really nice roll to this, lows well...a bit surreal...i think i got it but i am no where near sure...ha

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  2. I can't decide what I like best--the title, the first line, the last line or everything in between. This reminds me of Nicola Barker if she wrote poetry (maybe she does). I'm glad you do.

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  3. One moment delirium... I can relate to that...that levelled cement is hard to navigate at times. Interesting write!

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  4. Cool piece, I like the play on words here. Little Riding- Could mean the literal, and the poem does have a ride type vibe to it, little writing- a short poem, or piece of writing, which this also satisfies. Then I like the leave/stay, I daren't then two lines later you use the word unrefined- Fits perfectly- I use / and make up words, turn nouns into verbs, create conjunctions and so forth- well someone told me once that doing so is unrefined, so now that backstory is out of the way, you can see why I love the way this read for me. Thanks, great job.

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  5. Internal monolog, verging on the surreal with a patina of riddle. You've set in play an intriguing concatenation of sounds and words whose mystery is its virtue.

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